Writing to Communicate
Imagine that you are in a world history class and that
your professor wants you to write about an aspect of your country’s history. Choose
one of these assignments.
·
Write about
the life of an important person or inventor in your country’s history
A Man With a Humble
and Pure Heart
Who can imagine
that Surakarta as one of the cities in Indonesia got the honored to give birth
of the number one person in Indonesia, Joko Widodo. June 21, 1961 was an
unforgottable day for Noto Mihardjo (father) and Sudjitami (mother) couples. In
that day, they born the only son of that family which later became the first
person in Indonesia. Known as Jokowi, he carry out his life with full of tears
and struggle. Several professions are passed by him in order to get the extra
money and meet the needs of his school things. Heaver, umbrella’s courier even
selling things are several examples professions that been cultivated by him in
his childhood. However, during this hard time, he never complain and keep struggle until the end. In the last, that
passion that make him get use to life in the suffer, stay honest and humble,
bring him to graduate from Gadjah Mada University and became mayor of Surakarta
in 2005. In his first political profession, he directly became attention to the
media because he can change Surakarta city to be the tourism destination city
and he also bring back Indonesia’d icon identity, Batik to be the icon of
Surakarta city. As the result now, Surakarta is known as Batik city. Start from
that time, his popularity increasing plus more when he win the election for the
governor election in Jakarta. As the result, in September 20, 2012 he won the
election and become the governor in Jakarta. Since that time, he became more
popular and several news started to spread along the citizen and there were
also some news which contains about him that will progress president election. It
is proven by his triumph in President election in 2014. Starting that day until
today, he still doing his best and still keep his humble, and pure heart.
·
Describe an
important building or monument in your country
Monas
Monas or monumen
nasional in bahasa is one of iconic icon in Indonesia. With 132 meter high or 433
feet making monas easy to be find even from a great distance though. This building
is built in order to commemorate the Indonesia’s patriot that been struggle for
Indonesian independence. At a glance, monas look like an ice-cream. Start from
the lower level of this building, there is a cube room that sustain this tall
pole of monas. So monas is contains of a cube in the lowest level of it and a
tall white and thin pole that stand up straight from the center of this cube
and in the top of it, there is cone that overlaid by gold. If we see from the
far distance, monas has it characteristic which is gold in top. In the top of
monas, that look like an ice-cream cone, is actually a visualisation of fire. This
fire means to keep firing the heart of every Indonesian citizen and keep
struggle for Indonesia independence. In the other hand, the lower level of
monas which shape is like a cube is actually a museum that shows history of
Indonesia. Not only that, we can also go to the highest level of monas and we
can see Jakarta’s view from the upper level. This monument established in 1975
and still there until now.
·
Explain an
important day, year, or decade in your country’s history.
Youth Pledge
There are several keyword that can describe
Indonesia’s Youth Pledge. First, Separation is the best word in order to
describe Indonesia’s Youth Pledge background. During that time, there is an
organization called Budi Utomo and this organization make a separation in the
organization. In simple, there is an organization in the organization. With
worst addition, this organization is not only one, but more than one which
means it separated Indonesia’s youth into several groups. In contrast, it
separated Indonesia’s youth into their own tribe which make discord from the
other youth. Realization is the next word that can describe it. After they
realize that they have to fight together in order to expel the invanders, they
become unity in one perspective that they are Indonesian. Furthermore, they realize
that they have to change their mindset as a unity of Indonesian in order to
survive from this everlasting colonialism. Third, fight is the best word that
can desribe Youth Pledge background. After they make the same mindset, they
start to fight for one name, Indonesia and not their own tribe anymore. In short,
by separation, realization, and fight in the end create the Youth Pledge which
keep Indonesian youth burnt until today in order to keep the unity of
Indonesia.
Dear Vicky~~
BalasHapusI always like the way you make the paragraph which is easy to understand, brief, and flawless. Well done! My suggestion only you need to make the outline of each paragraph and highlighting the Supporting Sentence (major) also underlined the Topic Sentence and Concluding Sentence. One more, you cannot say "bahasa" only, but "Bahasa Indonesia". I think these all I can give you. Perhaps other comment would help.
Cheers,
Inanda M.
I think your three paragraph are very good, but I have the same point with Inan , you should underline the topic sentence and supporting sentence as well. I am looking forward your next essay. Fighting.
BalasHapusThe paragraphs are expressing briefly and without any meaningless part even a single word. So I can get your thoughts and comprehension from the description easily when see it. What I want to suggest is to underline the major part or the supporting sentence of each paragraph, that can be a promotion with better structure of your paragraphs. And thanks for your sharing, Vicky.
HapusHello Vicky, Glad to see your paragraph. I'm like your way to described the idea in that paragraph, Also I think your paragraph was well-structured. My suggestion is
BalasHapusFor the first paragraph "As the result, in September 20, 2012 he won the election and become the governor in Jakarta." I thinks that you should delete "he won the election" because you already stated it in the previous sentences.
For the Second paragraph "Monas or monumen nasional in bahasa is one of iconic icon in Indonesia." become "Monas or Monumen Nasional in Indonesia languange is one of the iconic building in Indonesia".
Thank you and Keep it up Vicky ^_^
Hello Vicky, Many apologies for this late respond...
BalasHapusThis probably the best paragraphs that I have read from you, it has an excellent way of writing, organized, and interesting to read. However, I want to give a suggestion for this word " Start from that time, his popularity increasing plus more when he win the election for the governor election in Jakarta." change to Start from that time, his popularity rose up higher when he won the election for the governor election in Jakarta. I think the use of plus and more at the same time is a bit redundant and the verb increasing and win should be in past tense. Apart from that, this is a superbly written paragraph. Again, sorry for being clumsy
Hallo vicky!:D
BalasHapusI like your paragraph. The way you write it is simple and your topic is a bit famous in Indonesia hehe. I think for the suggestion, it is better for you to use underline of highlight in the main topics of your paragraph. Overall, good work vicky! Keep it up!:))
Warm regards,
Nur Intan K.
I would like to say thank you for those who have comment in my blog.
BalasHapusI want to apologize first because I can not make the correction in the comment because, I have to put color and underlining several sentence. When I try it to put it in the comment, the color and the underline is not coming up. In short, I will re-post my correction.
Thank you for all of your comment and support
Victoria Vanessa